tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post7512999196122995676..comments2024-01-30T16:59:10.060+00:00Comments on Pascale Petit's Blog: The Bird Artists by Laurie ByroPascale Petithttp://www.blogger.com/profile/03496315815638953200noreply@blogger.comBlogger8125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-2443956911067642792009-07-05T01:37:58.457+01:002009-07-05T01:37:58.457+01:00Enjambment works most effectively when the line en...Enjambment works most effectively when the line ends on a noun or verb in which the line contains a full unit of sense, but when our eye falls on the first word of the next line, it realises that the meaning has carried over.<br /><br />At random, i haver a collection by Michael McKim: Still This Need, and the second and third couplet of a poem called Coventry on page 25, will illustrate this example.<br /><br />Does it really keep on going or does it simply end<br />with the cut on the paper? All is guesswork.<br /><br />Now you see the city for what it is, and infiltration<br />on a lake brimming with laughing geese.<br /><br />~<br /><br />So we can see that enjambent is the splicing in the middle of a clause in the sentance which when done best, keeps our eyes on their toes because in the milisecond between it taking in the end-word, to it moving left and down to the first word of the following line, we are suspended in a vaccum of unknowing if the clause seals itself or carries over, and the element of surprise enters the equation, a halting almost unconscious quiver of space and time in which the directional possibilities of the poem are up in the air and because we do not know what is coming the potential in that silence of the line being enjambed or not, offers a heightened perception of routes we may travel and adds to the overall craftspersonship which contributes to our overall reading experience.Desmond Swordshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08510948482448985966noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-81758289608964622932009-07-02T20:08:38.110+01:002009-07-02T20:08:38.110+01:00Laurie, I ordered The Bird Artists today and am so...Laurie, I ordered <i>The Bird Artists</i> today and am so looking forward to reading it.<br /><br />And yes to Laurie's full-length collection, Pascale.Michellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07747839768257543728noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-73509598061479014812009-07-02T09:26:52.939+01:002009-07-02T09:26:52.939+01:00Hi Michelle, really pleased you like this poem, th...Hi Michelle, really pleased you like this poem, there are plenty of other fabulous ones in the booklet including 'The Bird Artists' itself. <br /><br />Hi, Anonymous, I think the enjambments in this poem enhance the nonstop pace, and act rather like a wolf's leaps from terrain to terrain. The line breaks also read aloud quite naturally and add pauses to add extra weight to some phrases such as "he devoured". <br /><br />Laurie, I hope your full-length collection will soon follow...Pascale Petithttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03496315815638953200noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-19852706667256642672009-06-30T23:44:06.353+01:002009-06-30T23:44:06.353+01:00one more comment and not to I dunno impeded on Pas...one more comment and not to I dunno impeded on Pascale's tail feathers. For months before I appeared before her anonymously and she the judge, everyone said "you and she could be twins you are so alike in your styles"--I've bought each one of her books. She's the best. Again, it reminds me of the Dylan "simple twist of fate" "I still believe she was my twin but I lost the rings. She was born in Spring" etc....<br /><br />peace all and hushing up now...<br /><br />LaurieLaurie Byrohttp://lauriebyro.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-50889237342069645582009-06-30T23:40:19.193+01:002009-06-30T23:40:19.193+01:00oh Michelle: Thanks so much. I am over the moon wi...oh Michelle: Thanks so much. I am over the moon with the reception of this. I waited almost 10 years to put something together and get something compiled. I had been in Uni press for a long time, but honestly, I'm glad I did it the way I did it. It felt good somehow, like Dylan (i'm a dylanist) like I wanted creative control and to have something come out as it needed to. Peace and best wishes. LaurieLaurie Byrohttp://lauriebyro.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-24665750906447593312009-06-30T23:37:23.754+01:002009-06-30T23:37:23.754+01:00Hi there:
I was told by teachers that line breaks...Hi there:<br /><br />I was told by teachers that line breaks are mysterious and hard to give "rules" for. Sometimes, I like to break on a verb so that it gives the poem a racy jazzy feel. Unless of course, I am counting beats for pentameter. This poem simply seen to "feel" right in lines of three. Hope this helps, I'd be eager to hear what you think. PeaceLaurie Byrohttp://lauriebyro.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-30060122928501320132009-06-30T18:41:23.767+01:002009-06-30T18:41:23.767+01:00'Wolf Dreams' is mesmerising. Thank you fo...'Wolf Dreams' is mesmerising. Thank you for letting us know about this, Pascale.<br /><br />Laurie, congratulations on your firstborn, <i>The Bird Artists</i>. May you have many more successes.Michellehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07747839768257543728noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-7406925524977670641.post-3635975097005072272009-06-30T17:05:31.370+01:002009-06-30T17:05:31.370+01:00What do you make of the enjambent in that poem?What do you make of the enjambent in that poem?Anonymousnoreply@blogger.com